Sailor of the last mile blues

9 months of solitary life inside a dark cave.
Sailing on waters with confined directions.
But constantly fed by the goddess without any hassle
Never did i know the word called hunger.
Months passed by, I increased her burden even more.
But never did she show any dissent towards me.
Rather I felt her love every single time,
As gently as it could be, just like the subtle morning breeze.
One fine day, I found my way out of the cave.
A sense of elation gripped me for having attaining freedom.
But it was the goddess who helped me find it.
Unable to thank her enough, I rowed my way out.
Having seen the outside sea somehow,
I knew there were bigger tides to come.
Atleast not right away, but some miles down the lane.
for they would await me for a face-off.
I rowed my way all along the sea,
Dressed up in a new attire,
I could see numerous other ones like mine
Trying to find ways in different directions.
Years passed by, I grew up a matured sailor.
Still finding the best way possible to the nearest island.
Unclear of the storm ahead.
I continued to sail on.
My boat moved on just like i wanted it to.
Invariably towards the turbulent winds
Pulling the flags hard to get back on course,
Unwillingly succumbing to it sometimes.
As I sailed through different shores, hoping for a company
I found a divine angel, as if it was awaiting me
I moved towards her hurriedly everytime,
Only to find her standing many a mile.
I kept moving farther away from all of them
unknowing of when i would topple.
The fear of losing to the tides was on my mind.
With tears in the eyes and with an optimistic heart,
I continued rowing my sailing boat.
10 Comments:
Itz beautiful...
with the blessings of ur Goddess...
wish u find Her very soon...
Ahemmmmm wat do i say!!! beautiful asusual!!! description and the link between real life to the sailor is very imaginative and nice!!! keep it up!!
To be frank,i can see a poetic arch between your lines.The words of a true English Poet!Wish you all d best..krish. KL
hiii anna i read the poem fully its really nice..
"9 months of solitary life inside a dark cave.
Sailing on waters with confined directions.
But constantly fed by the goddess without any hassle
Never did i know the word called hunger.
Months passed by, I increased her burden even more.
But never did she show any dissent towards me.
Rather I felt her love every single time,
As gently as it could be, just like the subtle morning breeze."
these lineshas impressed me a lot..... and ur comparison of life to sailing boat is nice...
and i wish u'll become a great poet one day
excellent.....the array of words impressed me very much and i felt elated by your comparison of life. I hope that the fire in you should reach the heights of the sky. Bravo...boy...keep it up.
hey superb poem... fantastic imagination..
"I kept moving farther away from all of them
unknowing of when i would topple.
The fear of losing to the tides was on my mind.
With tears in the eyes and with an optimistic heart,
I continued rowing my sailing boat."
the ending is what touched me the most
Awesome says the pen
Which penned the lyric
the Lyric of open thoughts.
sairam, its kumanan.
dont know if others figured it out. but i know you are talking about your mum here. nice bro.
am here again sai dear! nd kumu datz obviously hiz MOM.. but therz sumtin dat i noted not sure abt otherz thou.. u hav said so many wonderful tingz with deep thoughtz lyk diz one wich iz my Fav..
I kept moving farther away from all of them
unknowing of when i would topple.(u mean our careerz here wich takez us away from our REAL LIFE...v tend to move away from our loved onez owing to our buzy dayz..)
The fear of losing to the tides was on my mind.(u juz had ur goalz nd objectivez on mind for wich u forwent ur LIFE) --- thez linez signify our determinationz nd responsibilities towardz life…
With tears in the eyes and with an optimistic heart,(thou u realize ur mistake stil proceed reassuring urslf)---- diz line signifies our helplessness to forgo certain tingz to fulfil our responsibilities…I mean th helplessness insipte of our self realizationz
I continued rowing my sailing boat.
by th way
As I sailed through different shores, hoping for a company
I found a divine angel, as if it was awaiting me
I moved towards her hurriedly everytime,
Only to find her standing many a mile.
Whoz dat angel ur talking abt? Here am sure itz not ur MOM… ;)
I continued rowing my sailing boat.
(mayb in search of her ;) hehe…
---il b bak..nd u knw dat wel..
CUTE CRITIC nd ur proud buddy!
on th whole, AWESOME (as usual!)
hai.... i dont kn abt u. but i have to appreciate ur talent....all ur poems are simply superb.... keep it up....
Post a Comment
<< Home